hello,my name is tian jiaxin ,i'm twelve year age .I had a happy family,they are four people in my family，there are my father,my mother,my brother and I . i like me. do you like me?
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Hello, my name is Tian Jiaxin. I'm twelve years age. I have a happy family. There are four people in my family. They are my father, my mother, my brother and I. They all like me. How about you?
The summer holiday is coming . I am going to my hometown to see my grandparents first . Then I have to review my lessons because some of my lessons are bad . At last I plan to visit Beijing. Beijing is the capital of my country and there are many places of interests, such as the Great Wall , the Summer Palace.
I think I will have a good and interesting time this summer.
I had a busy weekend . I did lots of things Saturday morning , I watered the plants . Then , I sent some emails to my friends . In the afternoon , I didmy homework . Then , I played the piano . In the evening , I cleaned my room by myself . Then , My family and I visited family and friends . On Sunday morning , I fished with my best friend , Anna . Then ,I painted the picture . In the afternoon , I read an interesting book . Then , My mother and I went to the beach sea was beautiful . In the evening , I ate a big dinner . The food was spicy and delicious. Then , I saw a film at the cinema. The film was nice .I was busy but I was happy.
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I had a busy weekend. I did lots of things. On Saturday morning, I watered the plants. Then, I sent some emails to my friends. In the afternoon, I did my homework. Then, I played the piano. In the evening, I cleaned my room by myself. Then, My family and I visited family and friends.
On Sunday morning, I fishedwithmybest friend, Anna. Then, I painted the picture. In the afternoon , I read an interesting book. Then, My mother and I went to the beach. The sea was beautiful. In the evening, I ate a big dinner. The food was spicy and delicious. Then, I saw a film at the cinema. The film was nice . I was busy but I was happy.
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